just keep that thing huh.. sory just asking nothing matter

http://www.astrobunny.net/2007/04/27/my-otaku-poem/

And the reason why there are no caps: it looks better. :P

I literally bursted out laughing when I saw that long comment coming in.. oh dear oh dear

be happy you actually have a version of your poem in the very own language of Dante

The first noticeable part of form is the upturned cone-shaped first stanza. The increasingly lengthening lines convey a sense of increasing trama and dispair. Each line conveys one of the poet’s woes. With each new line, the reader is given a deeper sense of problem, and gets surrounded more deeply with an increasing trepidation. This is because the poet effectively outline one problem in each line, deepenig the sense of problems building up. This is effective as the reading time of each line(based on the number of syllabels) also increases, making the feeling very apparent. The lines created by the cone shape of the first stanza also serves to create a sense of entrance, into the poem.

The next point I will discuss is the poet’s use of Rhyme in the poem. In the second stanza, the poet uses an alternating-line rhyme structure. words such as “P”, “be” and “three”, as well as “dusk”, “pass” and “task” serve to secure in the reader the sense of amounting problems already created in stanza one. The repeating rhymes create a feeling of repitition. It is this repitition that also gives the reader the feeling that the problems arising repeatedly, hence deepening the enclosure of despair. The repeating effect also drives in the message that the poet is feeling distressed. This is effective as the entire stanza is filled with rhyme. Hence, because of the continuity of the rhyme, the reader is not given any respite from the friving-in of the message. Along with the despair, a sense of weakening is also given.

The poet uses a sharp, ironic, and cynical choice of diction to end the poem. The curtness of the line “i need a money press and a time machine.” expresses the actual hopelessness of the poet’s situation. The hope for an impossibility of arbitrarily large amounts of money and time reveal the poet’s self-mocking edge. The wish for something impossible and the hopelessness of the event occuring puts across the poet’s own hopelessness. This is effective as the the impossibility is immediately apparent to the reader and as readers, by common sense, we immediately recognise the impossibility and hopelessness.

I would go one with this critical analysis, like with the avoidance of caps and other stuff but I am too tired right now…night

everythings possible with a gun (well almost).

Did I step into a bizarro universe where DM’s blog suddenly turned into a LiveJournal account?

I must be having a nightmare.